Oneshot: Darkness

[higure]

This is probably the most I have ever spammed my f-list in a day, since I am posting for the 3rd time today. I am sorry. This fic is long overdue, it is actually the first ever request I received. But as it is Dir en Grey and totally not my fandom it took long. Thanks sis for waiting patiently. I did research still I can´t probably do these "hard core dudes"! XD And it is not long either, I still hope you will find at least something you like in the weirdness this has become.

Title: Darkness
Pairing: Kaoru/Die
Rating: PG
Summary: prompted with: “Sometimes the sky looks like the sea. Sometimes the sea looks like the sky. Sometimes I am you. And sometimes. You are me.” and this picture

No beta
Disclaimer: It would be really fun, if I could just order them online, and in a week they would arrive in a box all plastered with signs FRAGILE on it.

Requested by/written for chivakaza



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Comments

[serpentia99.livejournal.com]

alright:

this.
was.
great.

really. an unusually good piece of work =) I can't compare it to any other stuff you've got written, so I can't say it's your best, and I wouldn't necessary say it's Die and Kaoru of Dir en grey, but this does not mean it is not well written. propably one of the best poetic stuff I've been reading on an LJ for a very long time.

loves:

There is no Kaoru, there is no Die, in the dark you are me and me is you and then the palm moves upwards, caressing the neck, slowly holding a jaw, a cheek and Die curls from inside and his body follows, leaning into the touch, and then forward, his head falls on Kaoru´s chest and a heartbeat tells him that there is still world around them.

that switch from narrative perspective into personal narration is nice. you could have used this more often, because it is good. not everyone knows how to do it.

all in all your style reminds me of an quite famous german author. christina wolf is her name. maybe you take a look at her work to improve your own =) just a suggestion

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

THANK YOU

Anyway they are not my fandom, and that´s why this is a little different from other stuff I write and I admit they are probably out of character, as really I did research but hardly enough ...

as for writing I usually go with my guts, I am not professional and am not really aimig to be one, it is a way to filter my emotion really. Hence the switching and that it doesn´t happen enough, I have to wip my emotions into that state to be able to switch smoothly if you know what I mean ....

Comparing me to Christina Wolf is kind of ... too much (even though only in style), as I said I write for fun and she is great writer -a pro.

anyway I am glad you liked my imaginery in this despite them not being deg kaoru and die, on the other hand, in certain moments they might have not wanted to be that (in my imagination at least)

♥

[serpentia99.livejournal.com]

well there not too much ooc, because you didnt do enough research (there surely isnt a fixed version of their characters anyways), but its like your text isnt exactly fixed on special character traits. its nice, because one can use the own imagination

sry... it shouldnt been a comparision, rather an assiciation, because I've been reading her some while ago. she is much more confusing than you anyways. =) i just thought it might be interesting you as writing styles always develop