One shot: Here with you

[higure]

Title: Here with you
Pairing: Sho/Aiba (established)
Rating: PG 13 (?)
Summary: Sho gets a little too comfortable in Aiba´s living room and their relationship.

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Disclaimer: It would be really fun, if I could just order them online, and in a week they would arrive in a box all plastered with signs FRAGILE on it.

Requested by/ for resha_hime

 

Through the storm we reach the shore
You give it all but I want more
And I'm waiting for you
U2, With or Without you

This fic was moved to my writing community pillow_verse, to read the fic, follow the link: maybe daydreaming, maybe planning their free time activities


IDEK!!! As my sister put it, nothing is sacred for me anymore (now this is totally Slovak idiom and I can´t for my life recall some English equivalent). And it´s been a while since I wrote in the past tense, so it might be a mess, especially the section with Sho alone n Aiba´s apartment. I apologize.

Also other than the first sentence that says “Sho-chan …” I am really doubtful about this. I can´t grasp Arashi, I think. That´s why I was so reluctant to write them. Also this is the first thing in several days that didn´t get deleted before it was finished or afterwards. It took a loads of will power to not hit Ctrl+A and Delete. But I kind of got affectionate towards this at the end so I am posting it and I hope it is not a total miss. Also I think the household rules thing might be completely unnecessary but I didn´t want to leave that piece of paper unattended. I should write one more Sakuraiba, and I will because I have an idea for it but I might butcher them again.

Yeah, I would appreciate someone telling me how much off I am with this. I won´t mind at all, au contraire!

Comments

[legsinthepond.livejournal.com]

I thought it was brilliant. IMHO Aiba was very real, in turns bouncy, totally stereotypical Aiba, and withdrawn and caring, in that maturity of his that we don't often see on camera, but is definitely there. It's like he's treating Sho like one of those wild animals he hangs around with! He'll get in there and hug the thing, even when claws come out, but also he's also capable of backing off and giving it space when he might get hurt. Wow, terrible description, but I think you captured very well the dichotomy of Aiba, so it was very nice to read.

Sho was a bit of a meanie in this, sometimes I think he'd definitely melt like butter when Aiba's around. But it illustrated very well how bad habits can develop, and how you can so easily take things for granted. It's like "don't miss it till it's gone" kind of mindset. With the stress, and maybe the fact that working at Aiba's place makes the work a little less terrible, it is plausible that bad habits could propagate in such a sad way.

For the purposes of the story I think you exaggerated certain characteristics of theirs (hmm.. not sure about that word), but not to a point where it was unrealistic. It was necessary for the oh-so-sweet payoff at the end, which was totally worth it. There was a feeling of sensuality as well, sort of quiet and a background to their relationship.

The whole story is both wonderful in its detail and feel, but yeah, it does feel a little stretched in terms of their behaviour towards each other. Sho was just a little too uptight, I mean, it appears like he has that side to him, but it also appears that Aiba is the one person to whom he's weak. The realisation of that and the making a LIST, is so very right though. Does it make sense if I say that Aiba seems a little too patient and accepting? I know that this is just an interpretation of him, and god knows I don't know him personally, so your interpretation is as good as any, better than many, and fits the story, it's just not how I see him. It's kind of melancholic though. Awww, Aiba.

OK, this is why I don't write, I have no coherency. Just have to say it would be a travesty if this had ended up in the recycle bin. Post post post! The final scene was perfection.

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

Wau!!! Thank you and this was totally coherent in my opinion.

I am happy you liked this and I was going for a bit of melancholy to tell the truth. I also realize Sho is kind of mean in this. The thing is I really showed just a small portion of their days, I still believe they had their moments just they were drawn in the sea of "not-moments" if you know what I mean.

About Aiba-throwing tantrum, I will remember it for the next time, that he too doesn´t have everlasting patience. It´s just that he gives off the vibe of someone who would rather step back when it comes to serious stuff, keep it in him, but on the other hand he has a huge temperament so I don´t really have a firm base for this assumption of mine. That´s why I keep saying I can´t grasp Arashi. They have so many layers, they are so complex, urgh ... Writing them for me is stripping them of those things and they do come out a little exagerated, don´t they?

Once again thank you for writting up that comment, it made me super happy:) I am glad you gave me such an insightfull feedback. ♥