One shot: Here with you

[higure]

Title: Here with you
Pairing: Sho/Aiba (established)
Rating: PG 13 (?)
Summary: Sho gets a little too comfortable in Aiba´s living room and their relationship.

No beta
Disclaimer: It would be really fun, if I could just order them online, and in a week they would arrive in a box all plastered with signs FRAGILE on it.

Requested by/ for resha_hime

 

Through the storm we reach the shore
You give it all but I want more
And I'm waiting for you
U2, With or Without you

This fic was moved to my writing community pillow_verse, to read the fic, follow the link: maybe daydreaming, maybe planning their free time activities


IDEK!!! As my sister put it, nothing is sacred for me anymore (now this is totally Slovak idiom and I can´t for my life recall some English equivalent). And it´s been a while since I wrote in the past tense, so it might be a mess, especially the section with Sho alone n Aiba´s apartment. I apologize.

Also other than the first sentence that says “Sho-chan …” I am really doubtful about this. I can´t grasp Arashi, I think. That´s why I was so reluctant to write them. Also this is the first thing in several days that didn´t get deleted before it was finished or afterwards. It took a loads of will power to not hit Ctrl+A and Delete. But I kind of got affectionate towards this at the end so I am posting it and I hope it is not a total miss. Also I think the household rules thing might be completely unnecessary but I didn´t want to leave that piece of paper unattended. I should write one more Sakuraiba, and I will because I have an idea for it but I might butcher them again.

Yeah, I would appreciate someone telling me how much off I am with this. I won´t mind at all, au contraire!

Comments

[siuyeebsho.livejournal.com]

this is great ! luv it ^___^

[kitsie-chan.livejournal.com]

So. Sweet. <333

Totally fits Sho and Aiba's personality though. :p Even if I thought Aiba would've thrown a tantrum after a while. I know I would've. *mutters* Stupid Sho. :p

[legsinthepond.livejournal.com]

I thought it was brilliant. IMHO Aiba was very real, in turns bouncy, totally stereotypical Aiba, and withdrawn and caring, in that maturity of his that we don't often see on camera, but is definitely there. It's like he's treating Sho like one of those wild animals he hangs around with! He'll get in there and hug the thing, even when claws come out, but also he's also capable of backing off and giving it space when he might get hurt. Wow, terrible description, but I think you captured very well the dichotomy of Aiba, so it was very nice to read.

Sho was a bit of a meanie in this, sometimes I think he'd definitely melt like butter when Aiba's around. But it illustrated very well how bad habits can develop, and how you can so easily take things for granted. It's like "don't miss it till it's gone" kind of mindset. With the stress, and maybe the fact that working at Aiba's place makes the work a little less terrible, it is plausible that bad habits could propagate in such a sad way.

For the purposes of the story I think you exaggerated certain characteristics of theirs (hmm.. not sure about that word), but not to a point where it was unrealistic. It was necessary for the oh-so-sweet payoff at the end, which was totally worth it. There was a feeling of sensuality as well, sort of quiet and a background to their relationship.

The whole story is both wonderful in its detail and feel, but yeah, it does feel a little stretched in terms of their behaviour towards each other. Sho was just a little too uptight, I mean, it appears like he has that side to him, but it also appears that Aiba is the one person to whom he's weak. The realisation of that and the making a LIST, is so very right though. Does it make sense if I say that Aiba seems a little too patient and accepting? I know that this is just an interpretation of him, and god knows I don't know him personally, so your interpretation is as good as any, better than many, and fits the story, it's just not how I see him. It's kind of melancholic though. Awww, Aiba.

OK, this is why I don't write, I have no coherency. Just have to say it would be a travesty if this had ended up in the recycle bin. Post post post! The final scene was perfection.

[legsinthepond.livejournal.com]

Yeah, that's it. That's what I was trying to say - a tantrum! Aiba to a T.

[bokunosubete.livejournal.com]

oow oww oww..sho cute. <333 i love it! ^^

[all4cyanide.livejournal.com]

I was on the brink of tears this whole fic. It was too real. Like relationships get become that sometimes. Ah! I'm glad they fixed it at the end. <3 Thanks for sharing! It was great.

[irawrrx33.livejournal.com]

Nyaa, a part of this gave me that feeling where your heart is like ljsvna;uivba, you know? xD

But anyways, I really loved it :3 So adorable xD I'm surprised that Aiba-chan can actually carry Sho properly! xD Wouldn't his muscles be super heavy? :X (Yeah, but they're air. Lol. Kidding.)

Thanks for writing! <3

[gacktsgirl346.livejournal.com]

Omg this was really really lovely~~ ^^ I absolutely adored this fic! :DD
I think you captured them really quite well, with Aiba's exuberance for being with Sho, and yet his patience for Sho's work. I thought Sho was being a little too mean to Aiba (but then again I am a complete fluff writer so I might be bias xD) but I think the way you portrayed him really worked for this fic~ I think it made the ending just that much sweeter, and I absolutely adore sweet endings~ ^-^
As for your English, I thought it worked awesomely! ^^ I'm a native English speaker, and while I was reading this I thought you were too! Then i got to the end and realized it's not your native language! lol! xD So great job! I did see this line tho:

"He was used to go to Aiba´s place after work all the time. "

Change 'go' to 'going' and it'll be perfect! :D

Really, I'm glad you didn't delete this story because I absolutely loved it! Please do write your next Sakuraiba, I'd love to read it~
Thanks for sharing this story! <3

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

thanks XD

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

I guess he would, huh? Althoug somehow I can´t picture Aiba throwing tantrum about something serious, like I keep thinking he would draw back instead ... but as I said that is me still having hard time grasping Arashi. I will keep it in mind next time, that he too doesn´t have everlasting patience.

and THANK YOU, for talking to me about it and for saying it was sweet.

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

Wau!!! Thank you and this was totally coherent in my opinion.

I am happy you liked this and I was going for a bit of melancholy to tell the truth. I also realize Sho is kind of mean in this. The thing is I really showed just a small portion of their days, I still believe they had their moments just they were drawn in the sea of "not-moments" if you know what I mean.

About Aiba-throwing tantrum, I will remember it for the next time, that he too doesn´t have everlasting patience. It´s just that he gives off the vibe of someone who would rather step back when it comes to serious stuff, keep it in him, but on the other hand he has a huge temperament so I don´t really have a firm base for this assumption of mine. That´s why I keep saying I can´t grasp Arashi. They have so many layers, they are so complex, urgh ... Writing them for me is stripping them of those things and they do come out a little exagerated, don´t they?

Once again thank you for writting up that comment, it made me super happy:) I am glad you gave me such an insightfull feedback. ♥

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

thanks for loving on my ficXD

[resha-hime.livejournal.com]

You ROCK, girl. For someone who has never even READ Arashi before this, you did a VERY GOOD JOB. I love how you weave that teensy bit of almost-angst into the story but not actually address it? Subtle, that's what your fics are, they're subtle but hold a lot of meaning at the same time. Do I even make sense? Does it even matter?! You just need to know that you're an awesome writer! I'm not going to lie and say your English was perfect but then again, there is no such thing as perfect. For someone who isn't a native speaker, you've done very well and it's nothing a little practice can't fix. I love you so much for writing this for me and you totally didn't butcher anyone. Your Sho and Aiba surprisingly turned out very real. Aiba is just so tolerant and Sho is such an ignorant workaholic. I can just totally imagine something like this happening. I really love the household rules and it totally made up for Sho's neglect of Aiba in the first half of the fic. He couldn't have been sweeter and I don't think there would have been a better way to apologize than what he did. And I'm ECSTATIC that you want to write one more Sakuraiba. Don't write just one, write 19248120834102 more &hearts:

Thank you so very much for writing this. You're too kind to me. Is there anything I could do for you in return? D: And please do write more Sakuraiba~ XD Just tell me what to bribe you with. And with this, I can sleep and have sweet Sakuraiba dreams~! =D

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

To tell the truth I still can´t write sad endings. Good you didn´t know that while you were reading XD

And sorry to make you sad, I hope the said ending made up for it!

thank you for reading and letting me know how this made you feel XD

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

*___* can you like quote a comment because it made you so happy?

I am aware of Sho being mean in this, and yes I guess it is because I did try for this to be not a complete fluff. On the other hand, I love writing fluff and that´s how most of my works turn out, so I get where you are coming from XDDD

<3 and ♥ and thank you for saying all those nice things about this poor fiction of mine! I appreciate it greatly! And saying my mistakes weren´t so obvious as to give me away ♥. As you can see I am not coherent right now XD

I am off to fix that mistake and thanks again for your kind words! <3

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

You know I have read some for the past few days :D

And you are responsible for the almost angst and subtle, that´s what I got out of your request. I am happy you liked this, you don´t even know how much.

I love you back for loving on my fics :D, for thinking I didn´t butcher them, for being able to imagine this ♥(well I actually love you no matter what, but you get the message)

English - we talked about this, I try, I know I am far from perfect, but you know me I am too stuborn to get a beta, I feel this way I learn more.

I do want you to go back to writing, you know that, but I don´t want you to do it because I asked, or because you need to bribe me. I don´t want to get bribed into writing fics for you, there will be a request post again, hopefully, sometimes in the future :) And you never know when you´ll say something that will have me typing away the moment I see it on MSN or in a comment. So no bribing, my fictions are for free. Just I need time with Arashi.

Again I am greatfull and happy you like this, hope you do have those sweet SakurAiba dreams of yours. ♥

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

Actually I think it is much more plausible for Aiba to carry Sho than the other way around, Sho is smaller and we all know those muscles of his are kind of useless YD

thank you very much for reading and for your lovely comment XD

[soulezz.livejournal.com]

love it. it's so cute how Sho-chan is reflecting on his behaviour towards Aiba for the past couple of weeks/month, who knows. creating the Aiba Masaki house rules...that is just super cute and adoring. you go Sho. i also love the part where Aiba lifted Sho up and carried him to the bathroom, taking a bubble bath with clothes on. cute.♥

i'll be looking foward to your other Sakuraiba stories...i love this pairing the most within Arashi, and i don't think you could ever butcher them.

[kajalmonsta.livejournal.com]

i think you captured them really well, don't worry about that^^ i'm glad you didn't delete it^^

it was really nice, thank you very much for sharing^^

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

Well I could if I made them completely unbelievable, I am glad you don´t think I did that mistake XD

Thank you for your lovely words &heart;

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

thank you very much for reading and commenting XD

[iedahmoin.livejournal.com]

finish reread it.. well i need sakuraiba right now
to the story>>
poor aiba always rejected by sho
he should cry out of embarrassment,when sho rejected his hug..well maybe if its me T_T

hope more sakuraiba from you~~
thank you for sharing

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

thanks for liking and for the imput! I´ll see about the more, let´s hope so!

[boblemon.livejournal.com]

Wow, that was pretty adorable! Loved it when Sho realized that he was overworking himself and how nice Aiba was being about it. Their "make up" was just too cute! I can totally see them giggling together like that!

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

Thank you:) I am happy you enjoyed this attempt of mine!

[jendesu.livejournal.com]

I loved the ending!!! It made me smile like crazy!!!!!!
It's really pretty!!! =)

[sashjun.livejournal.com]

I am happy to hear you liked my crazy ending ....
♥
Thank you for calling this pretty!